tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-457448853740094441.post768436929688428386..comments2023-10-11T04:26:34.403-06:00Comments on Writing Fortress: Making the Writing Look GoodKerstenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08208370383994488655noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-457448853740094441.post-81424194957656263702010-08-17T13:47:07.805-06:002010-08-17T13:47:07.805-06:00Working on integrating action in my dialogue and k...Working on integrating action in my dialogue and keeping that darn passive voice out of my WIP. Great post Don!Peggy Urryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18166803931346895277noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-457448853740094441.post-56693956206321486662010-08-16T14:54:44.205-06:002010-08-16T14:54:44.205-06:00I fall into the passive voice trap. Its a contant ...I fall into the passive voice trap. Its a contant struggle for me.Steve Westoverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14281628136635926941noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-457448853740094441.post-88989722151875838152010-08-16T14:50:21.817-06:002010-08-16T14:50:21.817-06:00Uh, oh. I didn't think that first post went t...Uh, oh. I didn't think that first post went through!kbrebeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09146709601038107862noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-457448853740094441.post-64182904665830390112010-08-16T14:49:39.314-06:002010-08-16T14:49:39.314-06:00Good luck with your calling, Don. I write too muc...Good luck with your calling, Don. I write too much description, so I'm trying to seek balance. I'm also trying to work at building more reader emotion. Nice post!kbrebeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09146709601038107862noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-457448853740094441.post-72503479618242752482010-08-16T14:47:41.371-06:002010-08-16T14:47:41.371-06:00Good luck with your new calling, Don. I write too...Good luck with your new calling, Don. I write too much description, too. I'm trying to seek balance these days, plus I'm spending time thinking about how to increase my reader's emotions in the direction I want them to go. I've never bitten my nails in my life, and suddenly I am!kbrebeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09146709601038107862noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-457448853740094441.post-90584122501457994392010-08-16T13:12:27.619-06:002010-08-16T13:12:27.619-06:00I'm with you there, Michael - my first drafts ...I'm with you there, Michael - my first drafts are pretty spartan as well. I find that I'm too busy describing the action and writing the dialog that I don't have time to flesh out the scene until later revisions.Donhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17369952902975144773noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-457448853740094441.post-9358730707773934722010-08-16T09:38:18.537-06:002010-08-16T09:38:18.537-06:00I hear so much about too much description that som...I hear so much about too much description that sometimes I short-change a character or setting with insufficient detail. Sometimes it takes a longer (if you can believe that) second draft to breathe life into my story, then I cut from there. I'd love to be able to capture the right look and feel better on the first try.Michael Knudsenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05640030735263279057noreply@blogger.com